Would this scare you if this was a film?

sounds like a pretty good movie. the only parts i saw that might be bad is the part where he says were gonna play a game..thats to saw like. i think it would be better if he said something like good luck your gonna need it. and also the jad and kurva are a little confusing. maybe change them to chasity and jake. also explain how rachels dad escaped. and how rachel mike cole and kurva became unconcious. and they are supposed to be camping so he couldnt go to the toilet and find them on the floor. they could be near a lake and he goes to the dock to pee and sees them in a canoe. but those are just suggestions. i would watch it though